4-D Open/Close

[thomasfischersm]

• "Show another way of opening the embrace, at the cross from crossed system (leader takes shorter step)"
  No comma.

• "Practice both these ways"
  "Practice both ways" or "Practice both of these ways".

• "basketball distance, baseball distance, vs ping-pong ball distance"
  Those are fun terms.

• Steps 4 and 5 are unnecessary fluff.

• "When opening up on the backward ocho, the follower rolls her upper body across the embrace: point of contact moves from sternum-to-sternum, across closer to side so there is more of a v-shape"
  This is a very long sentence. Some long sentences are good, like when I read the NY Times for pleasure on a Sunday morning. This one is also a little hard to follow.

What about breaking the information down like this:
"The point of contact never cuts abruptly. The follower rolls her/his upper body across the embrace (from sternum-to-sternum to the side). For example, the close embrace can open to a v-shape during the backward ocho."

(This isn't the best copy. It's only to illustrate how to break key concepts out of your sentence to make short/clear sentences.)

• "The follower’s arms need to be mobile and allow distance to change"
  Debatable: "need to be mobile to allow the distance to change" There is a cause-and-effect relationship. The mobility is the reason that the distance can change.